Innovator, what is it that you're writing about here cuz the chorus says ur not the type to boast and that allre the content does so...... what's the point of the chorus... seems pointless.... flow was there and there was actually some decent lines in there... I guess this was like a keystyle session which is cool. A lot of cliche brag punches, but it read smooth enough and kinda felt like being in an old school flow circle.
Red glare, name fits.. this was a spark of fire. Some pretty nice lines and you had content that at least was note worthy. The flow was cool and the clever use of covers in ur ending showed me you can write and put together a story even when inspired. Short verse to do that in, but I guess this was uninspired. It still showed some nice skills and good development of a story that was very very short.
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