Frank, the flow was there and I was able to follow the content, but there wasn't really much to the content. It seemed to follow the standard brag about life kinda song usually heard on the radio, but in text, which isn't a good thing to be compared to. The math you used was just basic knowledge and not used to convey any real message... all this really shows is you know what math is and that you know how to rhyme. Id expect more from a champ match honestly... I'm hoping that you just didn't have time to write this week and this is just an effot to not no show. I can obviously see you have skills, but the effort wasn applied in this verse. There was 2 elements that I liked about ur verse and that was u went in song mode with a chous and you showed some cool rhymes within it as well. Content wise,this wasn't a good display imo..
Pohfig, you're kinda jumping all over the place within your content and the narration kinda reads like you didn't know where this was going til it got there, but it got there. The slight humor and carefree attitude is expressed and the flow was on point as well. It was smooth to read to the beat even tho that beat is weak and I don't like mos def at all.... using a lot of relateable examples for us all to get at least most of your content was done with some cleverness and I can appreciate that. Your ending actually wrapped it up nice enough for me to be happy with the it overall.
Vote pohfig for better content, narration, flow and overall message.
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