The chorus seems kind of awkward but I feel you could salvage it.
Quote:
This is crazy intense, I'm still stuck way in my head
Never knew a love like this that would hate me to death
Makes me depressed, thinkin bout her beautiful esssence
Put a hole in my heart that made room for a tenant
And the rent isnt cheap, but you gotta make you a plan
Cause there's to much damage for a maintenance man
Can't wait to fix what's broken, and your hopes are high
But your love's one sided, and your hope's to die
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I love this right here.
overall the verses flowed well and had good content but it lack multis which I would have liked to see more of but all in all this was sweet man.