Good first week showing you two forreal. Props.
IAmBenT: Dope verse. The italics portion of this piece seemed to be much better than the rest of the drop imo. Some great alliteration in there especially in the first segment. Great way to open up the verse imo and it remained steady throughout. Best segment was the second italics portion with those multis you were usin. Ill man.
Ink: Another dope verse from you as well. I've read that book as well in high school and you described it well. The imagery your piece captured was fuckin vivid man, but I'd have to leave just one complaint with your piece and that's that some lines were long winded to me. For instance the line about the mother leaving for the fields the next line is much too long winded for me. But if I had to say so you still encaptured this piece quite well.
As I've said before you both showed up great this week and for that props, but I've gotta vote with IAmBenT on this one. Nice battle fellas
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