lmfao. the beginning almost made me close this page/thread
but i kept reading and it actually started to rhyme and seem cool
wish it were longer. i don't like your breaks (,s) they seem off in places and make this read choppy
keep writing though. ending started to pick up. try a normal 16 lines next time instead of 5
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