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Old 03-08-2013, 07:39 PM   #4
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nice. this was flowing well for me even with the flipped schemes, but i got to
this "Because I won't waste a breath mentionin it." it threw the flow off for me
"..to mention it" wouldve been smoother in my opinion. nice drop tho bruh, it
was definitely expressive for it to be a key. i enjoyed this nonetheless, id just
say to keep working and try not to stretch a certain word or line, keep it simple
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