Nice key Zen, kept it steady all the way through.
"A mention of attention since I'm descendin into cuffs or a hearse" - Nice internals and progression of thought
"I'm a poet and I know it but how do I show it"- Felt really cliche, probably the weakest portion of the verse but adequately set up the following line
"When noone listens? I'm a ghost that's livin" Liked the visual with the paradox
The next two lines kinda strayed away from the theme a bit, which is something that tends to happen with freestyles but still something to mention and work on.
"I know I'm worlds away from the pearly gates but when that moments arisen" - Solid 'closer' line
Overall enjoyable key, only critique would be to have a concept generated and try sticking to it a bit closer and be careful not to stray off topic, but for what it was this is a solid read
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