"lobster and steak. my method's growing harder to read" - you should eat something then continue your report. Joke aside that whole last part was excellent, the last line in particular is great and cynical. "feeling lucid. Jesus Christ inside a carpenters dream" - could be a good novelty t-shirt catch phrase. The 'showing remorse - emotion en forme' was a very impressive and fancy rhyme. Also enjoyed the subtle switching of the rhyme technique in this section:
"full throttle revolver. six-shot Yosemite sharp
the only single animal let into the Arc
china doll. eyes an inky black. calligraphy mark
we're toxic like exhaust fumes and a sensitive heart" - it is cool how it was a little different every second line rather than the x4 that preceded it.
|