[CopyPat]

jeez another close one. Nigma, when i read uf first 2 lines i was like ohhhh shit this is gonna be sick. cause u ALWAYS have crazy schemes and multis. and then it just got jumbled and forced as fuck, i was really surprised by that. it had some good parts, it clearly wasn't your best work. my main feeling right now is suprise and shock. im stunned that it feels like u barely tried on this, especially up against someone as good as frank. even the length of ur verse was surprising. usually you have these huuuuge pieces, and u always write to pics so yeah this was well under my expectations of what u were going to bring to the table. ur last line was a good ender, and there were some others sprinkled throughout.

Frank. first paragraph was awesome. really took a cool approach to the topic, girl addicted to her online computer persona. nig kindof had the same idea but urs was more original i feel, and also had better imagery. great opener. middle paragraph was ok. still kept the story going, some of the rhymes were forced to keep the scheme, which didn't seem to make sense compared to the first which was so fluid and unique.
3rd paragraph u really fell off the rails. holding the scheme that long was completely unnecessary. i understand the wanting to use the trouble shooter at the end, as that related to computer issues as well etc. but you could have reused that scheme at the very end to make it work instead of forcing the piss out of it for 2/5 of the verse. also the story took a weird turn like i didn't really know what was going on. u made it seem like the cop fumbled his gun for like an hour so dude could rape her hahahaha. the very end where she ends up killing him tied it up at least though.

THis is a tough one again. strange actually. 2 strong writers that faltered. if you both faced "underdogs" here, instead of eachother, you could have easily both been out. luckily for u guys one will go through on a sub par performance, the exact opposite of what im sure we all thought shit one will be out and they will both be awesome.

Frank your last paragraph almost single-handedly lost this battle for u. it almost would have been better without it. of course u needed an ending but it was just weird to see u do what u did with it. Nig, to be honest felt like u wrote this in 5 mins bro. all things being equal i have to give the edge to Frankenstein because i feel like he put more effort in his piece as a whole, and had a slightly better idea to begin with. the execution of both wasn't great on this one, but frank did a bit more with it.. like i said almost too much, but certainly did more than nigma. close one.

VOTE: Neck Bolts