[Witty]

Pent - I really don't think you are being given enough credit for the direction in which you took this topic, I think it was very imaginative and from a technical stand point very polished. The general theme of the piece was something I'm not sure many would have thought of, and that's why I love picture topics so much, they really let originality shine through and it's cool to see what ideas different people get from the same image, it shows our minds are all unique. There isn't much to crititicize here, your wording was off on 3 occassions which made the lines a little awkward. The main thing that was brilliant about this was that there was 0 filler, every line was neccessary to the story you were telling and every line fed from the last line, as every good story must do.

Diode - Again, a very well told story with very little filler in it at all, the narrative was artfully written and imagery was very strong, that was probably the main highlight of this piece for me, I could envision everything you were saying in my head, you painted a picture and it was very entertaining. There was a lot to think about in this piece, it was very thought provoking. Your wording was off on too many occasions tho if I'm honest, I just couldn't really get a good flow going through the piece because every time I began to there was awkward wording which threw it off, it was a very minor problem, but it was noticeable. I always stress the importance of wording because of the fact that no matter how good your story is, if the flow of your piece keeps getting knocked off, it's gonna take away from the enjoyment the reader gets from the piece, even if only a little bit. This was very accomplished writing though, and a hugely enjoyable piece in terms of imagery and narrative.

Gonna go with Pent.