Netcees - View Single Post - ROUND ONE: (16)Mr. J vs. (17)Witty - (WITTY WINS 6-2)

CopyPat · 01-19-2014, 02:18 PM

woah. this was close. you basically both kinda did the same thing really.. fuck. i honestly dont know who i am going to vote for as a write this. i will skim again and try to i guess find certain things to like and dislike about each and go from there..ddamn

ok, i think i have a decision. MJ ur verse was solid. had really great imagery to be honest, which was the best part of this verse i would say. structurally/lyrically etc it was solid. average, nothing more nothing less. i felt u had a really strong verse going till the end. you kindof had this story going (not really based on the pic but based on war in general) but then at the end u kindof threw a curveball with your sitting in a room, addicted to drugs and telling the story. well that really didn't go with the pic obviously, and i also didn't like how u kindof gave up a little with the vocab at the end. u said fuck like 4 or 5 times and cunt.. just seemed a bit strange and out of place compared to the rest of your whole verse, the whole ending seemed a little out of place actually. i didnt get that he is crying to fight again???

Witty your flow was super smooth, and ide give u an edge over MJ there from a technical standpoint, but the main reason i think u won this is because u finished your thought a little better. you also made this about the pic a little more directly with the actual embrace at the end being what this pic actually is. i appreciated how you took it a little sideways as they were actually enemies, yet still hugging, i doubt anyone saw that coming. i will say though, if we are getting picky. that that probably wouldn't really make sense in this particular pic ONLY because theres some other dude just chilling there reading a book lol. if they had JUST finished an intense knife fight and he was dying in his arms right there then other buddy wouldn't just be chilling there hahaha. i docked u points for that witty. but to me that docking equaled mj's docking for the drugs/room/swearing ending. and wit got bonus points flipping the idea of them being enemies, and better flow/complexity.

VOTE: FOX IN A NAILBITER

01-19-2014, 02:18 PM	#10
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	woah. this was close. you basically both kinda did the same thing really.. fuck. i honestly dont know who i am going to vote for as a write this. i will skim again and try to i guess find certain things to like and dislike about each and go from there..ddamn ok, i think i have a decision. MJ ur verse was solid. had really great imagery to be honest, which was the best part of this verse i would say. structurally/lyrically etc it was solid. average, nothing more nothing less. i felt u had a really strong verse going till the end. you kindof had this story going (not really based on the pic but based on war in general) but then at the end u kindof threw a curveball with your sitting in a room, addicted to drugs and telling the story. well that really didn't go with the pic obviously, and i also didn't like how u kindof gave up a little with the vocab at the end. u said fuck like 4 or 5 times and cunt.. just seemed a bit strange and out of place compared to the rest of your whole verse, the whole ending seemed a little out of place actually. i didnt get that he is crying to fight again??? Witty your flow was super smooth, and ide give u an edge over MJ there from a technical standpoint, but the main reason i think u won this is because u finished your thought a little better. you also made this about the pic a little more directly with the actual embrace at the end being what this pic actually is. i appreciated how you took it a little sideways as they were actually enemies, yet still hugging, i doubt anyone saw that coming. i will say though, if we are getting picky. that that probably wouldn't really make sense in this particular pic ONLY because theres some other dude just chilling there reading a book lol. if they had JUST finished an intense knife fight and he was dying in his arms right there then other buddy wouldn't just be chilling there hahaha. i docked u points for that witty. but to me that docking equaled mj's docking for the drugs/room/swearing ending. and wit got bonus points flipping the idea of them being enemies, and better flow/complexity. VOTE: FOX IN A NAILBITER __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.