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Old 01-19-2014, 10:58 AM   #9
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I'm sorry but i must say this. i think witty is being robbed atm.

both writers gave us a rather obvious, war-torn soldier at arms impression of the picture. fine. but mr. j's was simply so cliche and, while it was well expounded enough, greatly lacked the cerebral affect and imagination of witty's. witty had one liners like

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Your version of life is my version of death
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Rain is pouring, it's dark....they say that war is an art
The body a canvas, the bullet a heavy brush stroke that tore it apart
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I cut my mind into sections, there's kindness, depression
i mean. J had the perspective of a soldier on the field who is determined to survive. running ablaze towards the front lines. but i think witness, while they shared an overlap in general concept, simply out wrote and out strategized his opponent here. the image becomes more powerful after reading witty's - the breakdown of the prideful soldier who holds his enemy in his arms as he takes his last breath. a final sign of humanity. its a strange and comforting thing.


voting for witness.


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