It's no surprise Frank went with vivid here, there styles are very similar in some aspects, stringing the multies out of the ass, and while there was a time when I did the same exact thing so this might seem like I'm being hypocritical, I found after some time that in one technical respect its admirable, but it's also really constrictive and comes off unnatural when overdone. The key is striking the balance somewhere in the middle. It wasn't the same type of vividlyvague verse I was used to seeing in the AOWL, expected him to flip the script with the topic at hand but didn't really get that feel from him here. Wise ways didn't so much either, but his writing style is much more effective here in my opinion, odd little snippets of great imagery like the marmalade strudel thing while coupled in something so complex is dope. There were odd lines I didn't perhaps think 'fit' as much, like the 'not made of bones, eating' thing that just seemed like an odd word choice just to keep the scheme and I can completely see why he would do it, but I'd sooner he didn't, it just comes off a bit unnatural is all. unnatural isn't always bad though, I def. feel he did his thing here, not so much a storytelling piece as a stand alone Open Mic drop if he decided to post it.
I've got wise ways here.
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