I liked nycs storylinr, and it was accentuated with a really great rhyme scheme and structure. A few misplaced words, but that's with any verse. I wish the piano / climbing metaphor could've been expanded on more but for what you did with the topic, it worked really well.
Ydk, great verse but it really lacked any originality. It's like you had a really emotional and personal story written but it hardly scratched the surface of the picture and barely worked with it. As far as the verse goes, like I said, well written, no real problems with it but it was just there...if you get my drift.
Vote, nyc.
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