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Red glare · 01-19-2014, 05:04 AM

pent up,

good drunk writing. standard veteran like cruise control. some cliche, generic aspects to the writing. the "frack now cash cow" seggment was one of the best couplets i have read in conjunction to a photo this round. the gallon of milk/gallon of oil was a spectacular idea diluted with an unclear stream lining. More connection between milk and oil throughout the verse would've been a verse worth writing.

diode,

I feel the slum dug aura of the writers voice, its very rags and sandals. the opening quote was very rural documentary. set the perspective for me. this verse reminds me of the boxer prince ali. he's very cocky and arrogant, pompous and boisterous so the vocabulary was good. gave it a godly touch. a story from the viewpoint of the blocks in the wall, witnessing all - creative.

the writing wasnt as "tight" in this battle but the magnitude of subject matter in llight of the picture is heavy on back to back reads.

ultimately i feel diode encompassed the photograph more - he pulled through in a stunner

01-19-2014, 05:04 AM	#11
Red glare Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 189 Battle Record: 7-9 Rep Power: 0	pent up, good drunk writing. standard veteran like cruise control. some cliche, generic aspects to the writing. the "frack now cash cow" seggment was one of the best couplets i have read in conjunction to a photo this round. the gallon of milk/gallon of oil was a spectacular idea diluted with an unclear stream lining. More connection between milk and oil throughout the verse would've been a verse worth writing. diode, I feel the slum dug aura of the writers voice, its very rags and sandals. the opening quote was very rural documentary. set the perspective for me. this verse reminds me of the boxer prince ali. he's very cocky and arrogant, pompous and boisterous so the vocabulary was good. gave it a godly touch. a story from the viewpoint of the blocks in the wall, witnessing all - creative. the writing wasnt as "tight" in this battle but the magnitude of subject matter in llight of the picture is heavy on back to back reads. ultimately i feel diode encompassed the photograph more - he pulled through in a stunner Last edited by Red glare; 01-19-2014 at 05:08 AM.