Great battle, and the beat is so FIRE!!
Adonis - Only maybe one or two places where i couldn't catch it, but it is very obvious that you have a great deal of skill and ability and matching a beat, especially one as unique and catchy as this. I feel that the swagger was ridiculously off the meter, the flow was just spectacular, great word choice and imagery, not the same ol same ol, you actually make it fun to read a verse on flossing and bitches! At the same time, the sense of arrogance mixed with hunger was real refreshing to read with the beat as the backdrop. The shift at the end where we "peep the real life" was a great way to flip the concept of the verse on its head.
Pryde - I liked some parts to this verse, I felt the lines were perhaps a little too long and could have used some parsing but this is something I suffer from as well. I feel like you took an angle at it that was a little too similar to Adonis and that's why this verse didn't shine to me as I felt it could have. It's obvious that you have talent, but some of this felt more off the cuff than planned and thoughtful. Plus there was no extra angle like Adonis had at the end.
Vote - Adonis for a more thorough and enjoyable verse
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