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NIGMA, from the beginning this was a tutorial in forced rhymes. its better to not even try to rhyme more than one syllable than to force me to mispronounce words to make it seem like more than one syllable rhymes, also the 4th line diverts the scheme down a different path. i dont know you but that isnt good mechanics BRO. smoking trees like tarzan lol cmonson. why wouldnt you say hitting? tarzan hit trees swinging from vines. he never smoked/lit them on fire.

but yo as i read more, its almost like when i force the lines to rhyme im taking on an accent, which leads me to believe you are british or something so i won't hold the forced stuff against you since it probably rhymes with you inflection. ok after reading it i thought it was cool. its a druggy who's a writer who helps his insanity out by writing and stuff its cool i dig the angle. you had good flow in places and know how to rhyme i think alot of it is just your accent like i said earlier. WASNT WOWED but this was cool.

FRANK

took me a few lines but the flow was on pretty solid. you lost me again tho with the police and i feel you shouldve dropped the scheme instead of sloppily trying to hold onto it. now in the last little piece you are keeping it going tho.

yea this sucked man

i didnt like it you tried holding onto a scheme and just sucked. you did it to the point where i dont even know what happened. were they fucking in front of the cop? it started out with a girl selling her virginity, she gets there and they get pulled over, and then a cop drops his "nuker" then they're fucking and somehow towards the end the cop is there again and someone gets shot at the end after a bunch of made up words to keep the scheme going.

i didnt like nigmas verse very much, but i dont like franks at all. you tried to hard if you wouldve kept it simple you couldve easily won this in my opinion. the second half felt rough and forced and seeing as you posted last night i think its a safe assumption to make that you rushed this. so props for posting

sorry if i came off like an ass in this vote but im just trying to keep it 100 with how i perceived them

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