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Old 01-17-2014, 06:05 PM   #5
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A putting green. Honest, yet still consumed with make believe
Been fly. Tink never had to glue or staple wings.
Her eyes bleed a perfect chartreuse for Maybelline
Sparkles, rouge & navel rings. Skirt leaks bronze apologies
Burning off the mahogany, in this churning pot of monotony
Constant ride of your life feeling. Surfer lost in tsunami dream
Nightmare portfolio. Billboards from Time Square to Tokyo

A natural. Hyphy. Aphrodite under pastel lighting

I mean a lot of girls are hot. She was Celsius bomb
Team player? Before you develop a bond she'd melt the baton

wise - this is why i listed you as one of the best. you're slept on as a serious threat because you have fun and play around with OM and cypher shit but you have a very serious skillset. like cake said, this was a great character sketch of sorts fueled by fantastic imagination and imagery. you think outside the box and it's highly rewarding. high re readability factor and really refreshing to see you out of your 'comfort zone' so to say.

VV you actually surprised me with this take and it was dope. you took it to a deeper place lol i honestly would not have considered this exact direction but i was feeling it for sure. it was an okay story, sort of a cool insight on how jealousy can get the best of us and make us do very regretful things. you had one of the toughest seedings this round and against most of the competitors you would have my vote but wise came with a more enjoyable verse for my personal interests..i could see you winning this battle, however, because many prefer the opposite..

anyway

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