[Objective]

NYC: Dope to see you back in the action again. The first four lines captivated me and you got a rich sense of words and when to use them to their full effect, I enjoy that. You keep it going in the same style and I love how the piece goes back in time as well, that shit's dope as fuck man. Also enjoyed the similie of piano playing to climbing rocks. As it continues and really reaches the highpoint of your piece with a symphony of words, a steady rhythm, a crescendo of great proportions and melodies that plays well to the theme at hand, in other notes; I really enjoyed the read. Got some serious ISTL highlight-vibes from this shit. Cool stuff.

YDK: Interesting opener, feeling it, really want to see where you go with it though. An emotional self-reflective piece with a depressive viewpoint that still manage to speak from the heart of the topic given. Also really enjoy this couplet:

''I've had ppl offer to help me but it's always the same script,
Acting like they know me but forgetting what my name is,''
^ That's some powerful lines right there!

Thought you were going well until this line;

''Now that shit ain't about love its all about necessity,
But I know she'll think less of me if I keep spending excessively.''
^ I mean, if you're struggling with bills and work insane shifts and complain when you're spending money excessively, what do you expect? It's in her right to think less of you if you keep doing that stuff and dreaming of living the high-life if you're having a kid.

''My psyches fucked up so excuse my crudeness,
I'm tired of excuses so show me where the truth is''
^ Be as crude as you want, but the truth is from what you're saying is that you're spending money on bullshit. Get yo shit together playa. Slow down on spending money on things you don't really have the time for anyways, and focus more on your kid and the child in question and you might see better days.

However, thought it picked up quite quick after that. Just really didn't make sense to me why he would do that. He seems reflective enough to have his priorities right, but he don't. The closure was pretty dope as well.

''I been through too much bad shit but my journey aint hapless
So I'll keep climbing till I cant, and my body collapses.''
^ Dope shit, but I'd like to know more about what it was that made this guy depressed. What are his real issues? I understand he got mental health, but not why he has them, you feel me?

Vote: Both had cool pieces but one stood out to me in this one and it was NYC/Totoro's verse, so he gets my vote. Why? He had a really creative approach, dope rhyme structure, cool metaphores and oneliners that struck you along with a more creative concept than YDK's. That's not to say that YDK didn't have dope lines and a flow to go with it as well cuz he certainly had, but the subject matter wasn't really that engaging and it left me with a few questions when I was done reading it. YDK was on topic and had a decent verse, but I felt it could have been better when it comes down to it.