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mike wrecka. this was cool. good mechanics forced in sections but not bad enough to make me focus on it i could keep reading unhindered. i dug the approach with the guy being a nutjob, the ending was wack tho cuz im guessing he jabbed his aorta with the pen, but he failed because he did it in the room with a doctor who could save his life so im left thinking he didnt kill himself, he's destined to live in misery doped up in psych wards because he tried to kill himself and has this multiple personality disorder mixed with delusions and whatever else. but i guess he could kick the doctor away while his blood squirted everywhere. but if the doc could get some hemostats on that shit or something pinch the artery he could feasibly save him. but im looking for flaws which means you dropped a solid post. not like oh shit im wowed but it worked

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killed it. im gonna say i lost focus midway through though, but thats probably my add, but yea the mechanics are good when you lost the flow you got it back and were smart with it flipping the schemes in and out in places to keep it technical. and the whole thing was dope, i was wondering how it tied into the pic at first but as you go into it you see with the aliens stealing the electricty and power from our brains, but in the end it corrupted them because humans are destruction manifested and our hatred seeped into them and they hated themselves and murked themselves

at least thats what i got from it. but word it was the better verse here. props to both

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