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Originally Posted by Flo Real
Im 3 steps up from you - unlike meth ill humour ya witta contribution
your 3 steps down from me - in skill, wins and fucking stages in evolution
okay
on the topic of 3's bitch look at yo loss count - you steppin upto flo?!
niggas won 3 matches but never once where it wasnt titled - CB wins by no show
more of a statement, coulda been done well
Your teams full of feelings So team Orc dont have a chance to champ
There's feeling sik, rayge, bordom an I have to face the one feelin camp
Could've been a lot slicker, but I felt like this came from a good spot. I prolly woulda put something along the lines of you feeling a mixture of those 3 that you have to face camp. idk. still okay hit leaving something to be desired since it was kinda predictable
You'll never have a big hit yo shit overplayed Yo concepts White noise
Nike tick yo loss to win ratio it lacks the frequency for that fight voice
I'm pretty sure I get this line, but it really didn't have much to it and wasn't conveyed too hard
Tweetin bout how he'll make it big but yo shit could be free n still Wont sell
I'll be a mod one day an tweeting this one time @banned camp I dropped this fucking bell
think this went for too much, you had a workable idea with banned camp but I feel like it got away from you
"your existence is basic"- You do know startin beef with il-Nik is bad for your health?
Doesnt respect his elders but then hes biting lines that older then himself
A quote to back this up woulda made it pretty solid, unless I missed something. Defintely coulda tied respecting the elderly into the older lines a little smoother, but this was pretty statementish
your flow is shit your punches are weak your concepts are simply played
Ultimate writer? Bitch leave this shit to cats that actually have skill in this trade
More statementy, meh concept
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Originally Posted by Camp Bell
"Waynes world where you think he's lost garth but then...he hasn't." - 'Movies that make you cry' thread
you cant stomach puns as i savor this bountiful meal
wrote this with the bubble guts, im not playing, shit about to get real
I think this is a flex... I think. if thats a nameflip at the end of your bar it kinda comes out of nowhere
your not getting out of this deal, admit it then forfeit
i'm busting flo's, he was stumbling for gold BEFORE jennifer lawrence
Like the tie-in but it coulda been a lot better - maybe using medals like places in this tourney and talking about how he's clumsily approaching it
my whispering skills raw, it brings attention to war
but when somebody says real talk, its usually dismissed and ignored
alright, nice flip
i'll stab this prick with a fork then your done bitch
if wayne get tears to come, wat brings ya spirit up, suckin dick for trukfit?
Dug the tie in, but the punch just kinda killed it. wasn't really set up well, coulda been cleaner
your not geared enough to compose trouble dude
no way this lame name wins, leaving the way he came in, flo with no W
Kinda liked it... kinda corny
your controlled and so gullible, its such a shame kid
Orc's pick just gift bagged a corpse quick, you was playing wit a saint nik
more of a flow thing and more directed at nika. Not a bad concept... but the whole saint nik thing coulda been harder. maybe like something elves/Ls... idk. this wasn't as well prepared to make saint nik a punch
all i do is work on grave digs, this jerk is makeshift
if real recognized real, your worthless is a personal statement, not a nameflip
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First off, nice job for two new guys - Flo, you seem pretty good as far as picking out ammo but you could benefit a lot if you were to try to start using some wordplay. Camp, you've come a pretty long way with how you were on NC. Your style's still got that swaggy flowy shit at times which can be great for delivery and wording, but you need to focus on setting up the punchlines a lot better. So both of you keep at it.
This is a tough call. Seems to be statements vs wordplay that coulda been a lot stronger. I think I have a decision but I'd like to sit on it for a bit first
Basically boiled down to
Your teams full of feelings So team Orc dont have a chance to champ
There's feeling sik, rayge, bordom an I have to face the one feelin camp
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my whispering skills raw, it brings attention to war
but when somebody says real talk, its usually dismissed and ignored
but I feel like beyond those two bars they were all attempts... and some of camp's were closer?
really close battle that i can see going either way, but I felt like Camp took it with better attempts
v/ Campbell
keep at it guys