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Old 01-14-2014, 02:10 AM   #23
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I present: Simon deading this mark - so fuck if this clown had wrote a rhyme for me
Since he's Jim, then Im flexing with bars without even sculpting my physique
Funny how Jimmy wanna type with a hot free, but his shook type wouldnt cross me
His last battle - WHEW - its like Jim has a bad knack with food, the way Ry's wasnt salty
Jims not clever at battlin'. Plus his setups were all over the place - Kevin McCallister
But we dont gotta look at a skateboard to know that youre a REGULAR ...amatuer!
JESUS, youve written your lines weak... and also dont scribble more rhymes please
So I dont mean craved frozen dessert whenever you see Jimmy's on ice? SCREAM
Next time, try formatting the verse like that, for starters. You still used an ice scream line, though, and the wittiest part of the verse (as Sharp Nine pointed out) was a Home Alone line you buried as a setup.
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