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Old 01-12-2014, 12:22 PM   #13
StarFaggot
Leave you flatlined.
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
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- Tag Team Tournament III

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AK - waterhole line was dope, caught slippin would've been cool with a better setup, now that she's your ex I don't think you should be the one to be making punchlines and this bar was ehh, greed deadly sin was nice concept but just didn't sting, balance beams is ok.

Overall an ok verse, no real bad misses, light stuff.


Greed - first punch has nice delivery but not meaningful, light work is played, paperwork line would've been better had you said your paperwork instead of a, Indian reservations played, last line the wp is forced.

Overall it was ok but a bit played.



Vote:
Alvin Karpis wins this battle. I'll take stupid humor over played stuff in this instance.
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