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Old 01-12-2014, 09:44 AM   #5
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Originally Posted by Split Eight View Post
Last 3 lines were okay. i don't like your structure or wording. idk if you were taking a shot at Wise Ways, but it was pretty weak as a punch or as a concept. "fried raging bore" didnt make sense to me.

most of your verses would be better as cypher posts. they are short and freeform and dont have a strong sense of direction. it might be why you dont get too much feed.

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I was not taking a shot at anyone. I was trying to joke around.
I was simply writing on the scene you see in the video. I like comedy... I guess I could have added more too it. Thanks for the feed!

the fried raging bore was a play on words. The spit being what they cook a boar or pig on.
also you could read it more like this

"honestly the stuff they spit is like fried
raging bore"
It could also mean that it is boring

Thanks for the feed
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