Last 3 lines were okay. i don't like your structure or wording. idk if you were taking a shot at Wise Ways, but it was pretty weak as a punch or as a concept. "fried raging bore" didnt make sense to me.
most of your verses would be better as cypher posts. they are short and freeform and dont have a strong sense of direction. it might be why you dont get too much feed.
keep keyin
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