This had it's moments...some things I liked and others not so much, thought some of your word choices were odd.
For example: I'm like a rubix cube liquor & it's like you made your shark fin glass...
Wasn't feelin' those at all fa real.
Some of your multies were good and then others were forced, either worded poorly or used as filler to complete the multiple rhyme...havin' said that though there's a few parts I thought were straight man.
I'm why you lack the knowledge to actually hold a real relationship...
You cry when your alone but in public act harder than a mason's wrist...
Fading quick you forgot what patience is...
^^Cool.
how many birthdays have you missed for ya nephew? yeah your bothers son!...
you covered fun, in your life how bout some responsibility...
like pouring another one fuck it, think of the possibilities!...
^^Liked these few lines aswell.
Decent read bro...a few things could have been tightened here and there, this is a rough snippet of what you can do it seems and even though a couple sections of this are hit and miss you still managed to leave me with an enjoyable read by the end of it.
Stay upwards.
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