It was a little elementary for me but i still see potential. Words liie bunkin and hutter knife are just real lame to put in a piece. Try concentrating on a subject and just let it come naturally. I see a lot of people trying to do too much, just talk like a normal person hut make it rhyme lol. Be smarter than the pen and paper. Andways for what it was it was cool. Keep at it bro, try some different shit. Peace
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