It's pretty hard to critique sumthin' when it's an exercise for your own benefit, unless you are regarded as some awesome personal trainer I guess but yeah this had some things which were cool and others not so...some of your word choices can be best described as odd which made certain places here read awkward, hence fuckin' the flow up imo...like I said 'tis tricky leavin' thoughts on an experimental joint man, last bar is dope though.
Stay uppity.
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