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Originally Posted by Just Write
demise and deception, a rise of inception
decline in the mind of the giants that tempt it
^^^ill.
his was good, i felt like it maybe was too structured though if you get what im saying.. like it was dat-dat-dat-dat-dat.... dat-dat-dat-dat-dat. Basically got boring after afew lines. Now on the middle italicized part that was a lot less multi's but content filled and just came out a little smoother which made it my favorite part of the piece. Last verse was fire too. Peace bro
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word, i'll try not to go so scheme/multi heavy on the next piece I write.
thanks for the feed. upping for more, drop a link and I will rtf in an OM of yours.