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All these leaders be pawns
backed by pieces that fall
mostly down by the way side in a heap on this board
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Nice. dont think ive ever read anything from you before. This was clean though. You definitely have your mechanics down:
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I'm a Columbine misfit into sneakin' up halls
unleashin' on balls to have your collarbones shifted
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the lines before followed the same rhyme scheme as well, but it was executed best here. syllable count was perfect and basically made for a better flow.
stick around and keep writing. you have all the equipment. cant wait to read more