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Old 01-09-2014, 12:48 AM   #2
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demise and deception, a rise of inception
decline in the mind of the giants that tempt it

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his was good, i felt like it maybe was too structured though if you get what im saying.. like it was dat-dat-dat-dat-dat.... dat-dat-dat-dat-dat. Basically got boring after afew lines. Now on the middle italicized part that was a lot less multi's but content filled and just came out a little smoother which made it my favorite part of the piece. Last verse was fire too. Peace bro
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