You should take off like Jets flyin’
Because after Jimmy wrecks Ryan, his career will be over…. like Rex Ryan’s
Not feeling this, IMO. I think you could have used the entire REX/WRECKS Ryan word play and flip it differently to make it more of a relevant concept and effective punch.
It would be better if you quit, or at least Duck the punches that I land to your chin
In a battle of the Wits, you’d do exactly that ^…..like your battle with him
Personal? Not sure but cool? I can only assume.
I never liked this dude but don’t get Jimmy wrong
I’ll bring 12 to your door with the turkey sliced….like delivery from Jimmy John’s
Not feeling this simile - Statement'ish.
There is something wrong with you Ryan I can’t put my Finger on it but I’ll try
Til Lars is like “Put it inside him, its fine, my girlfriend does it to me all the time”
Not really feeling this one either.
I don’t have an Xbox one but Ryse getting played
Wearing a leather skirt that shows off his legs just like that guy in the game
Statement'ish.
I hope you burn in hell and after you die and you’re lyin’ in dirt
They’ll say the only thing worse than Ryan 12….was Ryan’s 12 lines in his verse
Not effective at all. Way to basic.
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I workout daily, my lifting is mint
But I only do it on the reg cuz it includes hitting the Jim
Jim/GYM is played as hell, but I'll barely give it too you considering you played off of his name.
Seeing this dumbass, I keep laughin'
You ain't a complete idiot though, you're also 1/3rd retarded
In my language Laughin/Retarded do not rhyme. But even so, wasn't feeling this.
Jim's a crossdresser, the gayest of dudes
He could pass for a fagg0t.. run, swim, jump & play for 1 too
Ehhh - Not really feeling this either.
Your whore is a gymnast in bed & the way she flexes is truly wicked
Had the bitch Archer body in positions for shots Robin Hood couldn't mimic
Wording kind of through this off a little bit and made it come off kind of statement'ish but it's cool, still had some effect.
No one gives a flying fuck what this faggot wrote or said
I'ma call you alarm clock.. whenever I hear you I'll smack you on the head
Concept was played back in 2000. Never liked them then either.
I walk with confidence cuz it's a fact I'm sick
You'll never see Jim Carrey himself well - niggas just laugh at him
Ok'ish. Play off of his name once again. Could have worked on wording this a little bit differently to land more of an impact but it's ok.
Overall - I feel Ryan took this with consistency of some what so called "Punches" and "Disses". Both need to work on your concepts (Fresher ones of course) and executing them. A lot of statement'ish material which takes away from the effectiveness impact of the punch/diss you are attempting. Keep writing tho fellas.
MVGT: Ryan 12.
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