Angkor, I have been on record stating that your flawless presentation and creative way of displaying your piece were my biggest influence. I always said that making your piece visually appealing helps the read.
This was poetry. I was expecting exceptual rhymes but got something else. Poetry isnt about rhyme but carrying an emotion and painting a canvass.
"Life’s an intricate system of “tension” and “change”
spanning far beyond subatomic physical plane
observe the pacing, disaccharidase, digital age
idle intolerance; an argument for Heidegger’s claim
“Inanimate object”! Heh...ironic twist of conjugal fate
At least in this context; marriage, mix...lethargic exchange"
life is a rollercoaster ride of emotions, heartbreak and exceptance. you summed this up perfectly. dopeness
"silk ties, bitches lined up for hours of sex
First you get the money...then comes the power, respect"
my favorite line.
In the end, I'm assuming that the guy lived in a fantasy world of women, fancy cars and silk suits. I guess after all the fantasizing we do about what we want in life it all ends and comes crashing back to reality eventually. deep insight as usual. always dopeness and my invitation for a collabo still stands.
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Originally Posted by zygote
Hopefully without offending anybody, Defy Gravity has created the most impressive initial submission from a new user to join the competition. Outperformed his opponent in terms of rhyme scheme
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