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Old 01-05-2014, 06:59 PM   #19
Vulgar
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Toasters up. Crash Bandicoot with the jumpshot. A bowl of Cheerios stained with blood. Teddy bear congressional hearing. Etc.

I like your other work better than this one, the jokes weren't that funny IMO. The rhyming was quality - for example, your opening bar caught my attention even before I clicked on your open mic in the first place (the pop-up script) Needless to say, it made me hungry for women.

look out for Benny at night unless you're lending ya life
cuz the hollow tip I give you isn't empty advice
^Pretty original take.
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