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Old 01-05-2014, 06:18 PM   #5
Vulgar
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You didn't reveal much here in the form of personal details about the main character and his family. This was a parched version of what it could have been. Simplistic, which isn't a bad thing. It just leaves those hanging who were hoping for more of a full palate. Cool tie in with the title in the last line...just not very satisfying judging it from how I walked away from it.
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