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Old 01-05-2014, 02:44 PM   #2
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Wowzer. Dope. I'm always impressed when writers use vocab such as this and maintain the flow perfectly. Some lines were stretched more than others too and yet the flow wasn't fucked up from that either somehow. Nice. I also noticed some nice use of alliteration in certain lines. Whether that was intentional or not (I think it was so just say yes) it was a very nice touch to this. One of the best things I've read on here in awhile because with all the things I just mentioned its something else: unique to you. Vintage Vulgar. Keep doing you.
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