[Objective]

Vividlyleague:

You're starting off far from soft, it's kinda dope right there,
would enjoy it more if the intro somehow rhymed with affair.
The diary-route's nothing new although it's fire my dude,
it gets you in the mood with imaginary lines to be viewed.
The presence is there to be consumed, but the essence is clear;
another love story but there's a cool plot and sentences here.
I guess the menace of fear is what locked her up,
but I shouldn't wonder exactly what it was buttercup.
Fourth paragraph handle bars, it's vocabular spectacular,
a brief insight to Vulgar when he writes? A bit vernacular,
anything that doesn't reek of amateur, you get the ropes,
it's simply dope, at this point your storytelling seem to cope.
Speaking of storytelling, the story is quite compelling,
but it's also rebelling against the flow you're obviously selling.
However; I'm struggling to take a deep dive into your sweet mind,
it seems abit complex like the art of being street wise.
It's quite cool but a thumb rule should be to make it easy too,
You see; I was stuck with a few questions after I read it through.
And I did read it too, the second time I truly got it, it's on topic, from an artist to artist;
I enjoyed the closure, but to focus more on being coherent would be the smartest.

Frank:

Thanks for starting off by introducing me to your name,
simply reading it at the top of the page is kinda lame.
Not sure what I think of you being an officer dickhead,
good thing this is fiction, or I'd rather you'd be dead.
Just like Vividlyleague you write it as if it's a letter,
not just that it's slightly less clever you aint really doing it better.
But you're being more coherent, so that's giving you points,
you talk about drugs, but was it coke, heroin or laced joints?
K-9's are specified in substances, they don't specify in all,
so I'd like to know more about Thor and what drugs he recalls.
Truth be told I didn't really think it added much of an explosion,
you talk about a dog and that's how you know drugs? What about emotion?
Here it comes; Family against drugs, I guess they don't like tragedy,
speaking of tragedies; ''My wife'' two lines in a row? Don't get mad at me...
That's wack at your calibre, trust me, but let's focus on Dusty;
great characterization, but stretched lines? Don't tell me you're rusty...
Straight forward lines is cool, but you gotta make them count,
if ''you were picked''-line was a beat it'd be boredom with a sound.
No-one could sell a beta version for that many dollars, it's true kid,
instead of saying something smart you're coming off as stupid.

Second paragraph is pretty nice cuz it doesn't look like a draft,
the sentences shows that you know how to handle this craft.
But as it goes on my questions starts to form right at the core,
I mean, this certainly isn't the Frank I know from before,
Did you get bored and just went with the first idea you got?
No-one just starts sniffing cuz some kid said it was hot.
I'd lie if I said it was dope, cuz honestly; I think that it's not,
the story got potential, but it's awkward with this kinda plot.
I need answers to most of your story although I read it with ease,
but the shit with the K-9 seemed just as vague as you being police...

Vote: I didn't mean to talk shit about what you guys wrote,
but to me it's clear which one of the two came off as dope.
Frank had something in mind that I wasn't exactly feeling,
Vividly keeps revealing he's improving and basically stealing
my vote, I know if Frank was in the groove to win,
there's not an ounce of doubt that he'd get it then.

To make it blatantly clear to everyone here;
VividlyLeague's get my first vote of the year.