"Did the devil curve his spine
with a better birth in mind?"
"Photon Shepards sift through wide spectrums in delight.
Receptor type efforts and the messenger alike,
then what's left over... well, you can frame that as you'd like..."
Althought photon shepards was fucked out, to me. Otherwise, dope.
"Im finely tucked in a pocket."
"Then tightly clung writing's rungs. Climbing up to an object.
Sought a wondrous finding. Inside me, lightning struck lightly plucked.
The rise was inspiring.
I forgot where I was."
I liked those.
You read like a streamlined, poetic, and slightly less verbose Split Eight. You may have been writing before him, I don't know the timeline. When you drop the vocab-pants and write an affecting thought you're at your best, in my opinion. Then again, I find words with more than four syllables scary. But you really do know how to couch a phrase or idea in this format when you're not trying to be too complex. I enjoyed this, although I think some of the denser sections could have cleaned up a bit. The spots I highlighted may not have stood out so much to me without the aforementioned denser parts, though, so who knows.
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