ok geno. We know what u CAN do by this point, this was another good piece, and same story, could easily be crossed over to audio, its very clean and smooth. I want to see u try some more intense shit though lyrically.. and not even content but straight out structure, push urself schematically. rhyme 5, 6, 7, 8 , 9 syllables. just try it.
Example:
nuclear waste of rap! cause satans back when I grab the mic
with the wrath of christ, to put you on your ass flat -like a patch of ice!!
when i was reading i was thinkin/hoping your next line instead of just using the "grab the mic" scheme would continue the "satans back" scheme PLUS the new one u introduced the grab the mic one.. so like:
nuclear waste of rap! cause satans back when I grab the mic
to slay this track in the afterlife
the greatest man since the path of christ
you ladies man? yeah hermaphrodite
or something... lol but u know what i mean???? it was THERE and u didn't take it!
dead to rights, excite bike, the fury when you wiped the cartridge
technologically -I write the rawest! flawless flow!!
syrious syllable syllabus is all i know
same thing here. i wished u wouldve used the technologically part that u introduced and kept it going with the existing. like this
dead to rights, excite bike, the fury when you wiped the cartridge
technologically -I write the rawest!
ecologically your mic is garbage..
ahaha stupid but u get the point right?
Anyways just tryna see u elevate, i love ur shit, but i think u can do more with it now, since u've mastered ur current style, u know?
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