This was dope. Focused and concise. A few cadence slips but who really gives a shit. Not me, that's who. The poignancy of the last line with respect to the title is what really made it seep in.
However
the content was tiresome. If you're going to be introspective, be creative. Make it pretty so the reader is interested. You're dope though man, underrated imo.
Last edited by Figgly Wiggly; 01-01-2014 at 11:47 PM.
Reason: gay
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