Genocide: I watch too much discovery channel, so this stuff kinda bothers me... Wasps and Hornets can sting you multiple times without dying. I won't hold it against you, this time...
The rhymes were cool, but the off-rhyming was a bit too stretched at parts. (ex. heired and expired), and I felt throughout the piece that you were just stringing rhymes to glue together alot of lines that sounded nice but didn't work together very effectively..
The ending to the piece left much to be desired.. felt like you just pasted a twist in there to end the verse and be done with it.
That college abortions line was nice though.
Camp Bell:
My initial reaction was that this is an interesting perspective, definitely a unique take on the topic. I think your usage of ellipses (...) could have been better though.. I read the verse with and without them, and it seemed to hit harder without them. Some good lines in here though, I especially enjoyed your "branches brandished damaged leaves" line. But there were also places where it seems you stuck in words as filler to make the lines read smoother, but determining that is all subjective and I'm not docking anything based off that.. just something I wanted to bring up.
Vote: Camp Bell. What steered my vote was Camp Bell's take on the subject matter. Though there were patches in his verse that were a bit spotty, and I think the decision would have been a lot tougher if Genocide had a concept that was as intriguing.
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