Geno -- This was a dope concept. I feel like the beginning dragged out the characterization a little too long - that would be ok in a higher line limit but I think the fact that this was a more confined line limit the story needed to pop faster. It wasn't too action paced but it did have some dope commentary behind it. The idea (really, the fact) of outgrowing the people you grow up with and how it changes you is super dope and something i've explored several times in verses - I find it very relatable. Flow was pretty well paced, some of the rhymes bugged me but whatever it was still dope. If I could change one thing I think i'd have the ending be a little more chaotic and a little less "this is what happens when.." Still a solid verse man.
Camp -- Very direct and borderline conversational. I liked that it was streamlined but at the same time you threw witted jabs about the topic. Some of the rhyming though, kind of got to me - felt a little forced, its weird. In a way it the (sometimes) awkward wording made it seem conversational but it still didn't really FIT for me. I think what I disliked about this piece the most is that you gave yourself so much room to say whatever and I found a bit of redundancy between thoughts and lines. It's like your idea was "this" so you incorporated "this" several times and just reworded it. It was a pretty cool drop but it felt a little bit sophomoric in comparison to Geno's
Vote -- Geno
He had the better rounded out verse in my opinion from concept to execution.
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