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Old 03-04-2013, 07:49 PM   #13
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Tyson. Touching verse. Had a real story to tell.. I didn't think the correlation to the topic was that sturdy but none the less, it was a gripping tale and I appreciate the realness of it. Keep it 100. Keep at it.
Red glare. You got bars. Pun intended. This was different in terms of structure but needs work. You may have had the more interesting approach but your content wasn't as meaningful or articulate as your opponents. Keep at it.

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