I liked this piece. For how thickly worded this was, your scheming was pretty dope. I think for this piece the biggest achilles heel is consistency. End as heavily as you start. You started out with the illest vernacular, then you ended sounding like an average textcee that doesn't explore refined vocabulary at all. If your mental stamina slows, take a break. Revitalize that vigor you came with and kill it from top to bottom. I dug this piece, although I'm more partial to mid tier vocab abstract, than the word usage you experiment with. Great job. Keep droppin.
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