This one's tough guys. I don't know why you're doing this to me. Anyways, the emotional depth and focus are equally well presented in both pieces, but obviously presented in pretty different ways. Frank, the storyteller is strong in you (hehe). Love the nostalgic vibe the writing gave off despite the whole, uh, heroin, thing... yikes. No aspect of the details were forced in any way, and everything had its place in revealing some emotional truth and raping my empathy. Just how a good story should be. You get a gold star
Certain, the first stanza was like, yeah. whoa man. Yes.
The rest is good too, but that intro is exceptional. The only slow part of this verse was (and this is guna sound pedantic (alright cool I used that word today, phew)) the middle part of the second to last stanza. Applebee's made me laugh, but it was out of place. The bags under the eyes thing was corny to me but, hey, I'm just some faggot.
Franks verse is a time release capsule of adderall. You get the effects gradually over time. You get led along. I'm a druggy though, and I like a denser and more highier high.
V/Certain for the dome smack of a dose. Das potent. Whoever wins deserves it though. Good shit
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