I think if you made this less dense and a little crisper/ selective in setting up ur rhymes it would sound like very mature writing
Your stuff is always entertaining to page through. Id agree with C Raw. all the big words made me more interested in what u were saying
unless you are @
namix most people have a tough time getting readers to sit through their discourse on Zen and the Art of Multisyllable Maintenance (someone out their will get this joke and have a hearty laugh, maybe @
dead man )
dont forget to feed, young Swagawan