viv. seems like you are feeling your way around rhyming mechanics and advanced schemes, playing more with words and connotations than approaching a verse as "how do i say this thing that i want to say'". it's not objectively bad or good, but I just wAnted to point out the conceptual difference between yours and Certain's approach. The toying with words was very interesting, and since OM is all about flair/ how you make words fall together, i feel like this is important background study for anyone wanting to get familiar, get familiar. A few phrases and things I really liked that i havent seen before.
but on that note, i do not know what it meant all together.
Certain. I enjoyed the same lines as what Pancake quoted. This feels like a return to the writer you played when you first joined, those so many moons ago (lol july?).
This was a cool collab for me, because it showed two writers completely separated from eachother within their own interpretations of each other.. you got two very eifferent verses juxtaposed. It was just neat seeing how much they contrasted
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