Inno, ya took a very unique approach to this and sacrificed flow for imagery. Told a nice story and did so in vivid detail. Its hard to maintain a smooth rhyme scheme with the approach you took, and although improving on that is an obvious criticism, you had your own touch to the flow here and it turned out pretty good.
Mike, played it safe conceptually and took a more expected approach. Flowed fairly nicely from start to finish. My favorite aspect of this verse was that aside from covering the quote you also got the reader thinking. I was diggin your message here.
Both writers had their own spin on things this week, Mikes verse left more of a lasting impression on me. Good battle
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