Aes, you showed your potential in depth through what you said, however your rhymes were lacking complexity which took away from the read a bit. Aside from practicing, I'd recommend voting on as many battles as you have time for to help grasp the small things people do. This will also make you think critically and teach yourself what you like in others writing and hopefully have some of it rub off on you.
Vin, solid showing, didn't do anything exception conceptually but had an enjoyable rhyme scheme and painted some nice, vivid pictures.
The league appreciates two debuting writers showing up!
My vote goes to Vin
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