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Old 12-13-2013, 09:30 PM   #3
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"an hide the evil eyes
from my neighbors "

That was solid.

Obviously needs to be fleshed out, not even in terms of line length but in purpose and depth. Angel angles? Piece seems relatively troll-ish. This can't be judged as a 'poem' even though it's structured like how someone thinks a poem should be structured. It's neither here no there.
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